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Author: CaughtRedhanded
ASL Info:    18/F/TN
Elite Ratio:    4.23 - 94 /41 /22
Words: 125
Class/Type: Poetry /Love
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This poem is for Bubby


You’ve shared with me a piece of you
And left me wanting more
I don’t remember a time in my life
Being touched like this before
Your words reflect a gentle heart
That’s strong and real and true
The more you talk the more I know
I need to be near you
I want to hear your voice
Hold your hand and be your friend
Make time to be together
I want our lives to blend
I dream of the moments we’d share
Held close in a loving embrace
Sharing our thoughts of the future
Lost in our intimate space
I’d savor the scent of your presence
And finally drift off to sleep
Holding memories created within me
Mine forever to cherish and keep

Submitted on 2008-01-08 08:43:26     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  What an excellent and tender love poem! I'm impressed that you provided an excellent structure, and excellent rhyme and rythmn! Nice work, lovely lady!
| Posted on 2008-05-10 00:00:00 | by Ron Cole | [ Reply to This ]
  Wow, usually I'm not a big fan of poems that rhyme, but you did really good. You got out a lot that you wanted to say and it didn't seem as though everything you say was constricted to trying to keep the rhyme scheme going.
I would love to read some free verse written by you. You have a lot to say and I think that you would write some incredible poetry if you were to try it. Just an idea.

| Posted on 2008-01-23 00:00:00 | by daughterofdeath | [ Reply to This ]
  very cute! i like it, but the one part,
"I dream of the moments we’d share
Held close in a loving embrace"
is kind of rough... it kind of mixes up the flow for that one little part. but i like the idea!
| Posted on 2008-01-09 00:00:00 | by Kaygrl | [ Reply to This ]
  I like this, it really creates an image in the readers mind. It's still an excellent love poem, but its not a mushy gushy kissy kissy type of poem, haha. Very nice work:)
| Posted on 2008-01-08 00:00:00 | by Mr.Seth | [ Reply to This ]

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