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    dots Submission Name: Lovedots
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    Author: PrettyHeart
    ASL Info:    39
    Elite Ratio:    3.06 - 62/55/53
    Words: 349
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 819
    Average Vote:    5.0000
    Bytes: 2045



    Description:
       This write is inspired by a wonderful man, for whom the feelings I have for are almost to much and that I love to much.


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    I dont know what it is about you, whatever it is, it is very powerful.
    I never felt this way before, and oh how I thought I knew about love.
    You must know now that I love you, I pray, please say that you do.
    I cant put a finger on what it is, why your presence has such a pull.

    Your love is...
    The touch of your hands,
    the dirft of your fingertips.
    Damn you have the softest kiss.

    We both know I cannot stay, this always has been known.
    It has nothing to do with love and you, oh well,I lie yes it does.
    Please promise you will not tell, and understand that I love you.
    Know that you can not come around and never can you phone.

    Your love is...
    your softest kiss.
    Your love is...
    the touch of your fingertips.
    Your love is...
    Knowing you will never let me go.

    You say I aroused feelings you considered to be dead.
    You ask me if I am pleased now, my answer yes I am.
    A questions is ask, when it is over how will I then feel,
    Will I miss his arms that held me,and loving words said.

    Our love is...
    Knowing we love each other so.
    My love is...
    Missing you soft kiss
    Your love is...
    Letting me go.

    As I stood at the doorstep frightened, in the darkness.
    My heart torn, my knees collide with the floor, I cried.
    One tear slid down my cheek and crashed to the floor.
    I'll miss your soft lips and the all of your tenderness.

    Your love is...
    the drift of your fingertips,
    Love is...
    Knowing you will never let go.
    Our love is...
    Letting you go.
    This love is...
    So very powerful.

    You ask if I am pleased now, yes I am contentful.
    I know you love me now, someway I always knew.
    I know now that you cannot remain, we cannot be.
    All this I know, all about love, it so very powerful.




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    ||| Comments |||
      Donna, you write with such passion and beauty! There is something that is so poetic about unrequited love, and about love that is abstained by separation or parting. Somehow the longing created by parting only adds drama and passion to the love affair.

    You have written this beautifully ad it tugs at the heart of all lovers!
    | Posted on 2008-01-08 00:00:00 | by Ron Cole | [ Reply to This ]
      The strongest emotion immaginable.......that is why love is so overpowering and all consuming.

    Your description is excellent, and your emotion jumps out of the page.

    Great stuff from you.

    Frank.
    | Posted on 2008-01-08 00:00:00 | by Frank Maguire | [ Reply to This ]


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