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    dots Submission Name: Flickering Heartdots

    Author: Mr.Ordinary
    ASL Info:    21/M/Navy
    Elite Ratio:    3.17 - 64/102/41
    Words: 81
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
    Total Views: 1197
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       i wrote this on christmas day, im just now getting around to post it

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    dotsFlickering Heartdots

    Flickering candle
    Flickering candle

    Love is such a pain
    My sadness feels of rain

    It rains, it pours
    Ive locked the doors

    My heart is gone
    I should have done this
    All along

    It rain, then shines
    In this life of mine

    There is a secret deep within
    This hate of mine
    Is such a sin
    Growing and growing
    Mowing at my soul

    Flickering candle
    Flickering heart

    Tell me where I must start

    Submitted on 2008-01-08 13:47:08     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      This was written very well. I liked it except that the way it was rhymed made it seems like a childrens poem. The rhyme kind of took away from the meaning of the poem. I had to read it a second time, slower, to get the depth of the poem. Other than that it was nice, and eventually I saw where you were coming from. Keep up the good work, and I'll keep reading

    »MIss MIsery«
    | Posted on 2008-01-09 00:00:00 | by MinervaBlu | [ Reply to This ]

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