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    dots Submission Name: A Piece dots
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    Author: mekisha4ever
    ASL Info:    39yespleaseNV.
    Elite Ratio:    1.58 - 38/36/47
    Words: 133
    Class/Type: Poetry/Longing
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    Description:
       who has a piece for me?


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    dotsA Piece dots
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    I just want a piece
    not all of you
    just a piece

    I just want some peace
    not to be alone
    just some time to think

    Can I have a piece of life
    I just can't keep my mind strait
    life just fly's by and Im gone

    when is it my turn
    I need a piece too
    I miss you so much

    where is my heart
    I can't seam to find it
    It is in pieces all over you

    Is it time for me to be whole yet
    I am broken inside
    I cant seam to pull it together

    I just want a piece
    not just any piece
    the peace that only you can bring




    Submitted on 2008-01-08 13:55:43     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      Very well written and put together. A real nice sentiment flows through this 'piece'.

    Frank.
    | Posted on 2009-07-10 00:00:00 | by Frank Maguire | [ Reply to This ]
      i love how you wrote this. very original!
    | Posted on 2008-01-09 00:00:00 | by Nessyjane | [ Reply to This ]


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