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    dots Submission Name: Old Visiondots
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    Author: justkillme08
    ASL Info:    18/F/MA
    Elite Ratio:    1.63 - 97/170/124
    Words: 217
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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    dotsOld Visiondots
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    when i put myself in that place
    i take myself out of the present
    i put myself into the past
    i think of your hand holding mine
    and your lipz upon mine
    and its as if i can feel it
    if i think it hard enough
    but thats only the good part
    of this thought i bring myself to
    cause i start this vision
    with the first day we kissd
    to end it with the last two weeks
    up until we split
    the shakyness
    the tears.
    they all just start to be so real
    why do i do this to myself
    but yet cant help but stay in this vision of disarray
    this vision leads up to our last talk
    face to face
    what am i doing
    why did i say we're over
    wishing i could say something else
    and awake from this vision with you still here
    but the vision goes on
    just how it happend
    i burst into tears
    and that night
    i wake tears and a broken heart
    what did i ever do wrong
    to feel such a pain
    and my vision stops
    the heartache less than it used to be
    but none the less your stilll not here wih me
    but its ok i kno i'll always love you
    but your gone forever.




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