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    dots Submission Name: Asumedots
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    Author: jermwerm
    ASL Info:    26/m/FRESNO CA
    Elite Ratio:    4.29 - 203/268/83
    Words: 79
    Class/Type: Random Thoughts/Me
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    dotsAsumedots
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    Till morning light I waver rights.
    Subdued intrusive bright midnights.
    Bewildered bloom of grasping doom,
    beneath a thought kept in my room.

    With sutle visions, aside intention, stale breeze I breath to listen.
    Calm and patient state of mind. Surreal solicit passing time.

    To noon so soon, so limed by lum, beside the moon where I asume.





    Submitted on 2008-01-08 17:50:44     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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