Asume by jermwerm

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Author:	jermwerm
ASL Info:	26/m/FRESNO CA
Elite Ratio:	4.29 - 203/268/83
Words:	79

Class/Type:	Random Thoughts/Me
Total Views:	1490
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Bytes:	429

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Asume

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Till morning light I waver rights.
Subdued intrusive bright midnights.
Bewildered bloom of grasping doom,
beneath a thought kept in my room.

With sutle visions, aside intention, stale breeze I breath to listen.
Calm and patient state of mind. Surreal solicit passing time.

To noon so soon, so limed by lum, beside the moon where I asume.

Submitted on 2008-01-08 17:50:44 Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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Be kind, take a few minutes to review the hard work of others <3 It means a lot to them, as it does to you.

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