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Asume


Author: jermwerm
ASL Info:    26/m/FRESNO CA
Elite Ratio:    4.29 - 203 /268 /83
Words: 79
Class/Type: Random Thoughts /Me
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Asume



Till morning light I waver rights.
Subdued intrusive bright midnights.
Bewildered bloom of grasping doom,
beneath a thought kept in my room.

With sutle visions, aside intention, stale breeze I breath to listen.
Calm and patient state of mind. Surreal solicit passing time.

To noon so soon, so limed by lum, beside the moon where I asume.





Submitted on 2008-01-08 17:50:44     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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