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    dots Submission Name: WHERE IS IT ?dots

    Author: layDsayD
    ASL Info:    29/f/florida
    Elite Ratio:    3.16 - 264/243/147
    Words: 183
    Class/Type: Poetry/Longing
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    dotsWHERE IS IT ?dots

    It never stays new
    All the cute things
    You realize you arenít as important as you thought
    Maybe you over hear a phone conversation
    Maybe you just become familiar
    You get forgotten amongst the everyday
    Loneliness seeps in
    Then sadness
    Finally anger
    No one cares
    No one really sees you anymore
    The struggle you thought you where in together
    Ends up being only yours in the end
    You thought you could be happy in mundane life
    The day in day out that is in essence humane
    But you cant
    Not really
    It is not enough to just exist
    You need passion
    Crazy insane love
    All the time
    Connection attention
    Sunset beaches and dancing in the rain
    Love songs
    Midnight promises
    Roses and candles
    Bitter fights and slow love making
    You want to be needed like air
    But after its all done you are simply exhaled

    Submitted on 2008-01-08 19:29:53     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      hey hi i liked this post kind of a crazy beautiful thing all wrapped in one

    well done and well said

    | Posted on 2008-01-09 00:00:00 | by sandman | [ Reply to This ]

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