Living Up To Expectations by Zyiera

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Submission Name: Living Up To Expectations dots

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Author:	Zyiera
ASL Info:	17/F
Elite Ratio:	1.08 - 9/4/6
Words:	37

Class/Type:	Poetry/
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Living Up To Expectations dots

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People push too hard
And you can't push back
So many things to do
For just one person

Screaming inside
You don't say a word
Drowning

Breaking into pieces
You feel the disapointment rushing down

Submitted on 2008-01-08 19:41:56 Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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Before you go any farther with this piece you need to fix the first line..."to" should read "too".
| Posted on 2008-01-10 00:00:00 | by ErgoIgo | [ Reply to This ]

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