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    dots Submission Name: Two Apologetic Kisses Say That My dots
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    Author: icaughtfire591
    ASL Info:    16/f/MI
    Elite Ratio:    4.27 - 75/74/39
    Words: 207
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 879
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    Bytes: 1383



    Description:
       this poem is also known as lau[ren] part 4. it's about my girlfriend...i love her more than life, and i'm going to marry her someday.


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    dotsTwo Apologetic Kisses Say That My dots
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    ...Mood Will Change Faster Than Your Eyes (the rest of the title wouldn't fit, oops)



    Baby let’s go
    Drive me anywhere
    Everywhere
    Put your foot down
    On the gas pedal…now.
    Take us away from here
    Anywhere
    As long as you’re near me
    I could scream!
    This white-knuckled driving
    Is so enthralling..
    Yeah, this will get us somewhere.
    And where have we been?
    You remind me yet again
    How I love that you’d rather
    Take your hands off the wheel
    Than let go of mine.
    So just how selfish am I?

    Yes, there you go again.
    I want to hear your engine roaring
    At the speed of sex.
    Tires spinning
    Against the black asphalt
    And where do we go to next?
    Where do we fly to next?
    Because this white-knuckled driving
    Is fucking exciting…

    Then we’ll run
    to your bed,
    Getting under the covers
    Of night.
    Baby baby baby…
    This feels beyond right.
    I haven’t felt this good in such a long time…
    I’m standing on my roof
    To scream to the whole world
    That you are mine..
    And when the morning unfurls
    How I’m lost in your eyes,
    (Those brown and sometimes
    amber or hazel eyes…)




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