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Undigging Toward The End.

Author: icaughtfire591
ASL Info:    16/f/MI
Elite Ratio:    4.27 - 75 /74 /39
Words: 77
Class/Type: Poetry /Love
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lau[ren] part deux.

Undigging Toward The End.

Melting, the cold steel of an abyssial nightmare..
Darkest chasms of thought in my head
Bleed out slowly,
Fingers itching,
Wrists begging,
Pulsing veinly..
You saved me
Pulled me out
Of this grave that I dug,
While the spades and razors
Danced the nights away
Engraving our passion into my core.
Endlessly, “I love you,” over the phone
“Well, I love you more.”
A smile unfolds on my lips
And it’s never felt better before.

Submitted on 2008-01-08 21:30:43     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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