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    dots Submission Name: The (InsertWordFor‘Passionate Nymphomaniac’Here]dots
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    Author: icaughtfire591
    ASL Info:    16/f/MI
    Elite Ratio:    4.27 - 75/74/39
    Words: 121
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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       lau[ren] part five...the latest one for now. thanks to anyone who took the time to read and/or comment on this or any of the others, i appreciate it and will be getting back to you.


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    dotsThe (InsertWordFor‘Passionate Nymphomaniac’Here]dots
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    ...Won That Bet [title wouldn't fit again, my apologies.]



    Though I still don’t really deserve it,
    Each second is infinitely worth it.
    Yes you’re blinking loud enough
    And I can’t take the silence, it’s too rough.
    Just like the ‘please, baby’s that shred my heart.
    Your endless pains breaking me apart.
    But stating all of these empathies
    to show the struggles of my narcissist apathy
    Is really just to say yet again,
    Forever and always, wifey,
    your lover and your friend…
    I am all yours baby.
    And I never want this to end.

    Her smile unfolds a bit more,
    And it’s as if she’s never loved like this before.

    “Iyou.”
    “Iyou too.”




    Submitted on 2008-01-08 21:38:07     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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