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    dots Submission Name: inside my chest where my birds are dots
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    Author: blackbird
    ASL Info:    31/male/reykjavik iceland
    Elite Ratio:    2.35 - 194/328/300
    Words: 105
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    Average Vote:    4.0000
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    dotsinside my chest where my birds are dots
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    who knew,
    that the rues
    & the whirls
    that rule the world
    could hold
    such oblong obligations?

    & the vexed may bless
    the hearts caress
    but only lonely idols
    feel the bruise.

    while the eternally amused
    lie internally confused
    by themselves,
    & drive back the past
    that seems to last
    forever
    or whatever.

    i've beaten back
    the pieces of the heart
    that come through the eyes
    & the blood that runs
    it's suns so hot within me.

    & the rest...
    i hide inside my chest
    where my birds are hidden,
    unbidden & so fondly there preserved




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