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    dots Submission Name: Apologydots
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    Author: Talamir
    Elite Ratio:    6.62 - 9/8/5
    Words: 51
    Class/Type: Poetry/Longing
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       I just don't know.


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    dotsApologydots
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    It's not pleasure
    But it's pain
    That tells you you're alive.

    It's not the dark,
    But it's the light,
    That creates the shadows on the wall.

    It's not reality,
    But our fantasy,
    Which guides our lives to live.

    And it's not me,
    It's you.
    Who should be apologizing.




    Submitted on 2008-01-09 00:05:56     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Beautiful.
    I love it, truly I do. It sums up my life right now perfectly. Its a fave sweetheart.
    Of course, you couldn't have a better ending if you spent your entire life attempting it.

    My life has been pretty much crud right now, I've been doing some things I know I shouldn't. It isn't quite my fault, due to the fact that I have a mental disorder. It seems as though the entire world blames everything I've done all on me, even though I just couldn't help it.

    "It's not pleasure
    But it's pain
    That tells you you're alive."

    Its a reminder yes, of who I am. Not a very pleasant one, but a reminder nonetheless. In case you haven't figured it out already, I'm a cutter. In addition, I've recently had a few guys tear my heart to shreds. Nothing feels more like being alive than that.

    "It's not the dark,
    But it's the light,
    That creates the shadows on the wall."

    Insightful, undoubtedly. It kind of makes me think. It isn't the fact that I've done all this wrong that seems to be casting a shadow over my life, its the fact that I also try to do what is right.

    "It's not reality,
    But our fantasy,
    Which guides our lives to live."

    This couldn't possibly be more true. All of our lives, we push to be something more, no matter how much reality defies it. So many times, we end up with nothing more than shattered dreams and empty lives. Sometimes its best to keep your dreams to yourself.

    Well, I loved it, and I'll say it again. Its beautiful.
    ^.^

    ~Jazzy
    | Posted on 2008-01-09 00:00:00 | by Jazzy | [ Reply to This ]


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