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A Love Poem for Mom

Author: Superman
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I'm hesitant to say much about this poem because I want the reader to figure it out on their own. Its nothing complicated, but I don't want to give away its secret.

A Love Poem for Mom

Submitted on 2008-01-09 06:17:52     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  I think this is really a very creative write, the only reason most mom's scream and roar and punish, is because they love us. It's all about the "this will hurt me more than it will hurt you" theme. You are probably the only teenager I have seen on this site who really, truly understands this. Yes you are mad, and think its unfair and everything else every other teenager in your position feels but what makes this so unique is the fact that you know why. It's because she loves you.

I liked it when you said "nothingexcepttheelevatedtones" She is shouting so fast and loud that it all sounds as one word, like Dino in Flintstones. Also how the stanza's connected with one another, like she is not stopping to breathe either.

I liked it a lot.
| Posted on 2008-01-09 00:00:00 | by Polydectes | [ Reply to This ]

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