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    dots Submission Name: Stepping lightlydots
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    Author: Dispair
    ASL Info:    23/m/qld
    Elite Ratio:    1.94 - 15/38/34
    Words: 128
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
    Total Views: 94
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    dotsStepping lightlydots
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    I take a step into a new direction
    My past plays a part in all I do
    Should I live a life without love
    Can I live a life without love

    A thought arises yet I push it down
    A girl comes to play but I skin her
    I take all that makes her, her
    And I turn it aside

    How can I struggle for happiness
    When I shelter myself
    How can I become real
    When I face only what I choose

    I place a marker on my heart
    And I watch it go
    To wherever it may flow
    It flows to you

    Can I take a step
    Can I take the step
    And lose what has become
    And lose you




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      i like this, it kind of sounds like a song... a bit choppy in places, but goos :)
    | Posted on 2008-01-09 00:00:00 | by Kaygrl | [ Reply to This ]


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