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    dots Submission Name: A Painted Deathdots
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    Author: PrettyHeart
    ASL Info:    39
    Elite Ratio:    3.06 - 62/55/53
    Words: 103
    Class/Type: Poetry/
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    A Painted Death

    Blow away, go on now;

    Stir up the air, color it for me.

    Lovely reds, bright yellows,vivid oranges,

    and deathly browns color the ground.

    Use them as your paints, color the air.

    Paint my canvas for me, my time is near.

    A chilly breath, breaths down my back.

    One last gust of colors swirl around,

    before a eager chill erases the canvas again.

    My lovely reds, bright yellows, vivid oranges,

    even the deathly browns gone from my site.

    Buried in the white grave.




    Submitted on 2008-01-09 10:21:46     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      Nice piece. Perhaps the death of Autumn's beauty, with one final plea for it's amazing artistry before winter arrives?

    | Posted on 2008-01-10 00:00:00 | by Intricate1 | [ Reply to This ]
      Wow, where did this come from and where are you going with it. Was this a precursory look at your eventual demise?
    | Posted on 2008-01-10 00:00:00 | by ErgoIgo | [ Reply to This ]


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