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    dots Submission Name: Aut Caesar Aut Nihil;Ave Atque Valedots

    Author: icaughtfire591
    ASL Info:    16/f/MI
    Elite Ratio:    4.27 - 75/74/39
    Words: 427
    Class/Type: Poetry/Longing
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       this one is a bit older but i realized that i like it more than i thought i did. just read into it a bit and you won't find it so corny...

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    dotsAut Caesar Aut Nihil;Ave Atque Valedots

    Once upon a time,
    There lived a queen
    Who ruled over
    Almost everything.

    On her head lay a
    Crown of woven thorns…
    Almost sharp enough
    To pierce her mind,
    But not quite.
    It pierced her scalp instead,
    And her skin it bled, it bled.
    Just not enough…

    She sat upon a throne
    Almost suited for royalty,
    But not quite.

    She was weak;
    Her heart had been broken before.
    It was not enough pain for her
    Entire kingdom to see,
    But almost.

    She was almost enough
    To pass for beautiful
    But not quite.
    She faked content with regality,
    Watching the others being chased
    By love struck eyes,
    As she struggled to chase away her failures.
    She looked on with a full smile
    That one could almost say was empty…
    But not quite.

    Indeed, she was almost good enough
    For a king
    With whom to share her dom.
    But not quite.
    A lonely crown sat in an almost empty throne
    Beside her
    And her love stood before her,
    Privately offering almost his whole heart…

    “Your highness,” he said with a half smile,
    Gazing into her eyes.
    Her soft heart almost melted completely,
    But not quite.

    He had taken his place beside her once before…almost.

    The queen was a hidden warrior,
    Lined with almost enough battle scars
    to begin to sew shut the gap in her life,
    But not quite…
    Almost enough for all of them to respect
    And sympathize with,
    But not quite.

    Indeed it turned out,
    She was never really queen of anything,
    But almost.
    Her very name reflected the fact that
    she was still just a princess,
    Not yet grown out of her physical youth...
    But almost.
    [Aged and worn nearly to death though she was
    In every other way.]
    And she longed for
    nothing more,

    And so it was and so it is
    In this God forsaken dream
    That in a deadly world
    there almost lived a queen.
    Once upon an almost time,
    In a castle on
    The mountainous hills of a
    Beautiful almost rhyme,
    In a kingdom, a life
    That was almost mine…
    But not quite yet.
    Not quite ever,
    Have you guessed?

    Her court and her subjects
    Almost raised a toast,
    To an almost leader
    Who was their almost royal host…
    “To Sabrina,” they would say,
    Who could later almost boast,
    That she was, in fact,
    the queen of everything Almost.

    Submitted on 2008-01-09 17:55:49     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      I like the Queen Of Almost! You made a remarkable character who could appear in stories whether verse or prose3; I hope she doesn't just get to be almost there, that is, only in this character description!

    I started feeling frustrated that I couldn't see her surroundings, her wierd country that could almost have an almost queen, the odd people she must be almost living and working with. And that almost-love story???! For pete's sake I want to read it!
    | Posted on 2008-01-09 00:00:00 | by Glen Bowman | [ Reply to This ]

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