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Promises


Author: angel_eyes9701
ASL Info:    24 F Salem, OR
Elite Ratio:    3.62 - 19 /33 /14
Words: 144
Class/Type: Poetry /Love
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It's a new love, a lifetime love but still new.


Promises



Take my hand when my eyes weep.
Hold me gently in your arms.
Finger my curls, as I sleep.
Dazzle me with all your charm.

Provide me time and space.
Listen closely when I speak.
Secure in your life my place.
Support me the times I'm weak.

Cherish our time together.
Dread any time we're apart.
Mean when you say forever.
Let my absence gnaw your heart.

And let all my joys be yours.
Let my sorrows be as well.
And share relationship chores.
Mind your ego, lest it swell.

And I beg you never fight.
Let us walk our time in peace.
With a kiss for every night,
Let our passions never cease.

But above all these my dove,
Swear always that you'll be true.
For's not you I ask these of -
They're my promises to you.




Submitted on 2008-01-10 09:47:17     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  Great poem. It's lovely. I liked it a lot. It flows nicely.
"Take my hand when my eyes weep.
Hold me gently in your arms."
This sort of shows the the sensitivity of the writing.
"Finger my curls, as I sleep.
Dazzle me with all your charm."
These lines show the basic love in the relationship and cherishness. (if it's a word).
"Provide me time and space.
Listen closely when I speak."
This shows how important it is to listen to your partner.
"Secure in your life my place.
Support me the times I'm weak."
This shows the closeness you have in your life. How you need someone when your weak.

Well, great writing. It sounds excellent. Keep writing and keep up the excellent work. I loved it a lot.
I will try to read the rest of your poetry. I love your work.
Well, great job.


~Samantha~

| Posted on 2008-01-10 00:00:00 | by The lost child | [ Reply to This ]


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