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    dots Submission Name: Poliziadots
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    Author: SanctityExposed
    ASL Info:    25
    Elite Ratio:    3.98 - 48/66/40
    Words: 129
    Class/Type: Poetry/Angry
    Total Views: 692
    Average Vote:    4.0000
    Bytes: 836



    Description:
       No idea. Something to do with cops. I just wrote it while listening to a Marilyn Manson song. o_o


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    dotsPoliziadots
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    Fill your quota, oh man.
    Fill it, fill it, fill it.
    Take me away in cuffs.
    Slap the steel against my willing wrists.

    Fill your quota, oh man.
    Six-pack in the backseat,
    Shit shit, he's gonna get me.
    Turn up the radio, blare him out.

    Okay, fuck you Officer.
    Fuck you again, and again.
    Fill your quota.
    I'm just a number on your check.

    I'll go to jail for you,
    So you can ring in the New Year
    with one more arrest.
    Fill your fucking quota.

    I'm not gonna care
    Once I get outta here.
    Try and stop me,
    I'll run that red light.

    Red means GO GO!
    Fuck you, and your squad.
    Fuck you and your quota.
    Catch me if you can!




    Submitted on 2008-01-10 18:04:47     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Ah...I feel relieved after reading that...like you took all my law-enforcement angst, wrapped it in a little ball, cooked it at 450 for a few days, and let it ripen in the sun.

    This sounds like it would do well at a coffee shop, spoken in understated anger like a freeverse spoken word. I can see the people in the audience going "Yeah...[censored] yeah sister" as they glide to the beat.

    I almost want there to be more, even though you get most everything in. But I still have more coffee.

    Nice write SE,

    James
    | Posted on 2008-01-14 00:00:00 | by FallenGrace | [ Reply to This ]
      Nice, it definitwely remined me of an earlier time in my life. You could probably drop a few of the F-Bombs and still poignantly convey your message but I'm kind of old now and I still the F-word alot so who am I to talk
    | Posted on 2008-01-11 00:00:00 | by Double Happy | [ Reply to This ]
      Ha! this is a funny piece but it doesn't feel real at all. I recently got arrested & those pigs made me feel like absolute [censored] & I really wanted to kill them instead of say '[censored] you'. & what's up w/ yr. wrists being 'willing'?

    But I like the line 'fill your quota' because it shows how far downhill law enforcement has gone since they all got computers. I also like how innocent the poem is, almost like reminiscing about one's first encounter w/ police..
    | Posted on 2008-01-10 00:00:00 | by Mark Huntsman | [ Reply to This ]


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