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    dots Submission Name: roping cranes unfill medots
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    Author: blackbird
    ASL Info:    31/male/reykjavik iceland
    Elite Ratio:    2.35 - 194/328/300
    Words: 122
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsroping cranes unfill medots
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    lean away
    & lean into the wild rough forest
    where the red woman
    leans into the leaning wind.

    i've been syruped
    into the mossy wool world
    with the itch of sticks
    & whistley thorns about my brow.

    & the cross stitch of silky skys
    abandons me
    amongst my under-darling
    lilly pawns.
    roping cranes
    unfill me
    with their filthy nests.

    sand may bleach me
    where the sun has kissed,
    but the missing places
    are where i catch my eyes
    searching for the missed.

    i've been the seedy concrete
    of winter
    with its marching boots
    & the all-greedy lust abundant
    beneath me..

    my love is stacked
    to creep the melting
    snowflakes back.




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