Writingpoetry

[ Join Free! ]
(No Spam mail)

dotsdots
nav
  • RolePlay
  • Join Us
  • Writings
  • Shoutbox
  • Community
  • Digg Mashup
  • Mp3 Search
  • Online Education
  • My Youtube
  • Ear Training
  • Funny Pics
  • nav



    nav
  • Role Play
  • Piano Music
  • Free Videos
  • Web 2.0
  • nav



    << | >>
    poetry


    dots Submission Name: tiger sun has felt me updots
    --------------------------------------------------------





    Author: blackbird
    ASL Info:    31/male/reykjavik iceland
    Elite Ratio:    2.35 - 194/328/300
    Words: 107
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
    Total Views: 728
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 869



    Description:
       


    Make the font bigger!! Double Spacing Back to recent posts.

    dotstiger sun has felt me updots
    -------------------------------------------


    beg not the icy groves
    whose midnights seem to plunder
    vanquished dreams.

    & the loosened forms
    of free-lust
    harbor equal harm
    amongst their charms.

    forest children
    hold your hearts firm.
    & the lighted paths
    may mossy
    yield their ways.

    glow trees,
    glow grass.
    with your gently melting
    sunny embankment, glister.
    inside me unravel
    winters lovely woman.

    the eyes of horror
    are upon us.
    & we've dove the milky summer
    towards our pyramidal loins.

    tiger sun has felt me up
    through the black stinging sheets
    of rolling slumbers.
    lucid tremblings
    linger pulsefully still.

    Oh memory,
    i am your lost corona...




    Submitted on 2008-01-10 23:37:16     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
    Submissions: [ Previous ] [ Next ]

    Rate This Submission

    1: >_<
    2: I dunno...
    3: meh!
    4: Pretty cool
    5: Wow!




    ||| Comments |||


    Think Feedback more than Compliments :: [ Guidelines ]

    1. Be honest.
    2. Try not to give only compliments.
    3. How did it make you feel?
    4. Why did it make you feel that way?
    5. Which parts?
    6. What distracted from the piece?
    7. What was unclear?
    8. What does it remind you of?
    9. How could it be improved?
    10. What would you have done differently?
    11. What was your interpretation of it?
    12. Does it feel original?



    155758

    Be kind, take a few minutes to review the hard work of others <3
    It means a lot to them, as it does to you.

    A Sense Of Things written by Daniel Barlow
    Whispered written by endlessgame23
    Beauty Rest written by jackz
    Snippet written by Daniel Barlow
    Untitled written by Daniel Barlow
    Not the Devil, but the Wind written by endlessgame23
    FamiliarDemons ©™ written by kyserin
    The Want written by Daniel Barlow
    In a Corner written by jeniecel
    Florida's Autumn Solstice written by closetpoet
    Day 6 written by TheStillSilence
    Twin Intercept written by Daniel Barlow
    going,,,"Skin." written by teika5
    Keep written by TheStillSilence
    When Sirens Whisper written by HisNameIsNoMore
    Live In Between written by teika5
    Loop-di-Loop written by endlessgame23
    Sword in the Water written by Wolfwatching
    A Thousand Reflections written by endlessgame23
    The World written by jjd
    Hyle written by endlessgame23
    Dream written by closetpoet
    Night- time written by Daniel Barlow
    Verse: written by Daniel Barlow
    Day 5 written by TheStillSilence
    Delicious Stews written by elephantasia
    untitled written by Outlaw
    The Curtain Call written by faideddarkness
    (Untitled Song) written by TeslaKoyal
    Mystery Read written by kyserin

    Google
     


    poetry

    dotsLogindots

    User Name:

    Password:

    [ Quick Signup ]
    [ Lost Password ]


    January 10 07
    131,497 Poems
    Posted

    I have 14,000+ Subscribers on Youtube. See my Video Tutorials

    [ Angst Poetry ]
    [ Cutters ]
    [ Famous Poetry ]
    [ Poetry Scams ]



    FontSize:
    [ Smaller ] [ Bigger ]
     Poetry