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    dots Submission Name: tiger sun has felt me updots
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    Author: blackbird
    ASL Info:    31/male/reykjavik iceland
    Elite Ratio:    2.35 - 194/328/300
    Words: 107
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    beg not the icy groves
    whose midnights seem to plunder
    vanquished dreams.

    & the loosened forms
    of free-lust
    harbor equal harm
    amongst their charms.

    forest children
    hold your hearts firm.
    & the lighted paths
    may mossy
    yield their ways.

    glow trees,
    glow grass.
    with your gently melting
    sunny embankment, glister.
    inside me unravel
    winters lovely woman.

    the eyes of horror
    are upon us.
    & we've dove the milky summer
    towards our pyramidal loins.

    tiger sun has felt me up
    through the black stinging sheets
    of rolling slumbers.
    lucid tremblings
    linger pulsefully still.

    Oh memory,
    i am your lost corona...




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