Confession of a Needy Soul... by Kersofmia

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Author:	Kersofmia
ASL Info:	19/m/Mia
Elite Ratio:	5.51 - 111/84/44
Words:	85

Class/Type:	Poetry/Misc
Total Views:	121
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Bytes:	564

Description:
Now I've had writers block for quite sometime everything I've posted lately is a re-post but this actually came to me while smoking a cig... Looking for any opinions and I hope inspiration doesn't stray to far again... Oh and the rhyme completely unintentional

Confession of a Needy Soul... dots

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Obsessive compulsion
Wanting what I can't have.
Trying to touch stars I can't reach,
Because I know they may not be there tomorrow.

Overflowing my life with things not feung shui.
Without global positioning to guide my way.
I cry out for something to call my own
But without a dictionary to define what that is.

I'm lost just another lost soul.
With my hand half extended yearning for a touch,
But not strong enough to grab another.
Fearing rejection...

Submitted on 2008-01-11 08:46:15 Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  Hi,
I like the idea of your poem. The wording is very simple but it has a very strong message behind it. I guess anyone can relate to this poem.
I think the feelings in this poem are so strong you really don't notice the "rhyme scheme".

I really did enjoy reading this piece. Good work.

I will take this opportunity to thank you for your comment on my poem "sweet intimacy". I appreciate your suggestions.

With love

Zohra
| Posted on 2008-04-28 00:00:00 | by shabnam | [ Reply to This ]
  I love the feung shui spin on it... like maybe the reason [censored]s not going the way you want it is blamed on a feung shui-less life

i see you're still sticking with the familiar format and still loving all the commas lol. which is fine, but i remember really wanting to see something totally off the wall from your norm.

but i do like this. it's nice seeing some new stuff from you
| Posted on 2008-01-11 00:00:00 | by MmR | [ Reply to This ]
  Hi there. I read in your poem an extraodinary loning for something `I cannot have`. This could just be that something very near to you because the stars arn`t that far away and will be there tomorrow, but you dont know if you will. In your heart of hearts you know this but to have it realized, you have to make it happen. Reach out and take the `hand` of a lost soul maybe not so lost but reachimng out for you, outstretched and dont fear the consequinces of something that has not happened yet. You see your stars but you do not have to go there because its their light that is reaching yout for you. Just grab it in your heart and all will become feung shui. Cool stuff.
| Posted on 2008-01-11 00:00:00 | by Joachim | [ Reply to This ]

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