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    dots Submission Name: Youth of the Nationdots
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    Author: Porcelaine
    ASL Info:    21/F/Croatia
    Elite Ratio:    3.82 - 850/653/234
    Words: 200
    Class/Type: Misc/Serious
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    dotsYouth of the Nationdots
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    We are the keepers of celestial tides

    Our lids have burned in
    The gentle, transgeneric Suns
    Lying amongst the ravian caterpillars that
    Scorched the maleficent through the wide
    Of their blood red dominion

    Dawns are the strangers that bid us farewell

    While our hands have broken
    Down the isle of infinity,
    The trillion monument worlds to call our own -
    They woke in a silent rhythm of genesis
    And we are no longer the princes' of nothing

    Cross-stellar wombs are changing at out fingertips

    Stars and permutations, the vibrations of life
    Bleed, as have we, in the crowning of the comeths
    Like titan queens up the distant solstices
    As the Unilair of planets bring the burden
    Of the youth of the Nation

    This is where a thought is born, superior and disconnected

    The gray incarceration in the phosphorous emptiness
    Cannot deafen the cries of the civilizations -
    The birth of the unknown towards the unknown
    And the flags have been raised to acknowledge existence
    On every threshold of the blossoming space

    Let it be known that the darkness has been…Erased







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      This is so involved and intense, but I love the stucture and the dynamism expressed here! Causes one to dwell on the heavy responsibility borne by the generations of our youth that will bear responsibility for the future of nations and indeed of the entire planet in a modern world. Well penned, my talented and lovely artist friend!
    | Posted on 2008-01-11 00:00:00 | by Ron Cole | [ Reply to This ]


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