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    dots Submission Name: Lord Byron and The Bowling Alleydots
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    Author: blu_kittin
    ASL Info:    20/F/Garden of Eden
    Elite Ratio:    6.15 - 711/397/207
    Words: 122
    Class/Type: Story/Death
    Total Views: 760
    Average Vote:    4.0000
    Bytes: 743



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    dotsLord Byron and The Bowling Alleydots
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    I watched him enter with a sense of dread
    That fear so tangible of someone I had never met
    I remembered tales told of bonfires and ditches
    I remembered his loved ones, crazy bitches
    I watched his eyes, that war had turned to stone
    Saw their cold dark depths, with a familiar tone
    He watched the balls careen towards pins
    and even when I said her name he didn't flinch
    He spoke soft or not at all
    Like treading lightly, after the fall
    I watched those eyes slide to me
    I stared right back, fearfully
    Lord Byron, with his eyes so dead
    Into Hell and back has tread
    The crowd of followers called his name
    And he retreated, to play a frame




    Submitted on 2008-01-11 11:40:14     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      I really like this. Seems accurate.
    | Posted on 2008-06-13 00:00:00 | by lori_tab | [ Reply to This ]
      I like it! Funny how people can like something that you write about because you don't like it, eh?

    I just like the image of Lord Byron turning up a a bowling alley!
    | Posted on 2008-01-11 00:00:00 | by Glen Bowman | [ Reply to This ]


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