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    dots Submission Name: Dilettante dots
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    Author: Algol46
    ASL Info:    200/m/East of Eden
    Elite Ratio:    2.72 - 1111/1235/613
    Words: 184
    Class/Type: Poetry/Dark
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    I seek my love where wine is
    And so learn to forget,
    For love is something shallow
    And melts like midnight tallow
    And bitter as the brine is,
    So full of sad regret.
    I seek my love where wine is
    And so learn to forget.

    So many, many lovers,
    In halls with cheap perfume,
    While I so suave and callow
    Sowed arid fields and fallow,
    Where death and ruin hovers,
    And tumbled down to doom.
    So many, many lovers,
    In halls with cheap perfume.

    My heart no more so glad is
    Poured out like some fine wine,
    Such vice I thought to hallow,
    Yet all my soul is sallow,
    And all life far too sad is,
    While lost is the divine.
    My heart no more so glad is
    Poured out like some fine wine.

    I seek my love where wine is
    And so learn to forget,
    For love is something shallow
    And melts like midnight tallow
    And bitter as the brine is,
    So full of sad regret.
    I seek my love where wine is
    And so learn to forget.





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      very lovely. a libertines lament.

    I've missed reading your work. it's really quite nice.
    | Posted on 2008-01-14 00:00:00 | by blu_kittin | [ Reply to This ]
      Aaaah, some lovelies love like a scorpion, and one is pressed to consider which was greater, the pleasure or the sting!! But, methinks, one also needs myraid excuses to partake in the medicinal benefits of fine wine! Which is better, wine or women, and where is the song?

    This is delightful, as is all of your excellent work! And, I particularly like those bits of verse devoted to the wiles of the lovely ladies!!
    | Posted on 2008-01-11 00:00:00 | by Ron Cole | [ Reply to This ]


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