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    dots Submission Name: She is callingdots
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    Author: elephantasia
    ASL Info:    37/F/UK
    Elite Ratio:    3.54 - 398/490/159
    Words: 174
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    She cups the light,
    She is a bowl for its shine.
    She smiles at her reflections
    and wonders what blinds them to herSelf.
    She trips often over her other selves
    and invites them home.
    All of us run.
    Some away
    and some into her wild embrace.
    She is warm and compassionate
    and can seem cold and souless.
    She will rip your heart out
    and make you look at every scar there.
    She will tear open every wound
    and dip salt coated fingers into each one
    to make you scream out your pain
    until you see meaning in the suffering.
    She carries the healing balm
    in her gnarled hands.
    Old, old womans hands.
    She demands you earn the answers
    and makes the price high.
    Their value is pure gold.
    You will love her for her fierceness
    with the fierceness of the love in you.
    She wants blood.
    She calls for your death.
    I myself am learning to die for her.

    She whispers to you too, calling.
    Can you hear? Will you answer?




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      I think this is about the Crone, or the teacher with whom we're paired in our lives. I like the contrasts you play between what we expect and what happens.

    Ultimately, everything turns out for the best, because chaos is our greatest teacher. Nice work, Kate, she's a legend in everyone's life and we need to be challenged.

    Nan
    | Posted on 2008-12-15 00:00:00 | by nansofast | [ Reply to This ]
      No. I will not answer, I already did. :) This is a truly great poem, although a bit cruel.
    | Posted on 2008-11-21 00:00:00 | by Paradox | [ Reply to This ]
      Yes, This is the "question" who is she?

    She is an enigma trying to explore and define herself.

    Great Imagery!!! But one must read it a couple of times to savour the flavour.

    " She trips often over her other selves" ( How precise ... emphatic .... powerful!!!!) "and invites them home"

    She hurts and heals, she makes you realize your own worth but not on easy terms... but the question is still there who is she... Destiny ... Self.... the quintessential woman ... or all these rolled into one?

    Great poem .... makes the reader think.
    | Posted on 2008-01-18 00:00:00 | by Parul garg | [ Reply to This ]
      Who is "she"? You've got me wondering. Is it me?
    I sort of saw myself in there somewhere. LOL

    Our inner strength?

    This is a really compelling and interesting piece. It reminds me of the pain we must bear at times to make us stronger.

    I like writings like this that make me think.

    Good stuff.
    | Posted on 2008-01-12 00:00:00 | by Intricate1 | [ Reply to This ]


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