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    dots Submission Name: heart of a liondots

    Author: williamwallace7
    ASL Info:    18/male/california
    Elite Ratio:    1.1 - 8/5/9
    Words: 215
    Class/Type: Poetry/Passion
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    dotsheart of a liondots

    his heart is beating the inside of his chest
    his eyes wildly scan the enemy and their hiding nest
    the sweat from his brow collides with the cool clean air
    for him to win this battle would be most exceptionally rare
    his mind explores the possibilites of death
    but he destires to honorably breath that last breath
    he turned to adress his army of brothers
    he saw as they let their fear run with each other
    'my brothers do not get caught up in these monsters and their evil torrent
    for it is my honor to sign all of our death warrants
    for tongiht we shall feast with all those we have killed
    but they will forgive us for their deaths god willed
    let the swing of your swords clash with their skulls
    for they are mindless and ingorant as bulls
    though tonight we shall fall to our deaths
    but your family will be safe, remember that in your last breaths'
    as the army charge and fought like gods
    they in the end did not beat the odds
    but the devestaion was so great and strong
    the enemy fleed and never again did wrong
    remember when the enemy has you beat and cryin'
    never run away but fight with the heart of a lion

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