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    dots Submission Name: Imaginedots
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    Author: Brianna_rose
    ASL Info:    14
    Elite Ratio:    3.49 - 11/13/11
    Words: 243
    Class/Type: Poetry/
    Total Views: 172
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    Description:
       I wrote this poem right when I got out of an abusive relationshop; it was sorta my way of coping.
    Hope you enjoy.
    :D


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    dotsImaginedots
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    Imagine me gone.
    Would you notice?
    Would you care?
    Imagine a place, where all is good.
    Where we speak no evil, we feel no hate.


    Alone, in a cold, dark world.
    The feeling of emptiness lingering.
    My pain my sorrow, spreading like cancer.

    You make me feel unworthy,
    unwanted, alone, used, and hated.
    You trash me, tear me, and break me, untill theirs nothing.
    You Make Me Everything You Hate, Everything You Despise.

    And then tell me you love me.
    Even though, inside I know it's all a lie.
    The words you scream, the hatred you say,
    I tell you, I'm not okay.

    The heartaches, the pain, they still remain.
    The flashbacks of screaming, and cold black nights laying on the floor.
    Tell me everythings fine.
    Tell me everything will be okay.
    Tell me you love me, lie to me once more.

    I say something you don't like, you beat me.
    You beat me till I bleed, screaming horrifying words.
    I scream, I scream again.
    And it's silent.
    I feel free, I feel pain, I feel no regrets, I feel like everythings gone.
    I lay there in the corner, not screaming once more.

    I see you leave, closing the door.
    Saying, see I bet you wont say that no more.
    Leaving me alone, leaving me to die.

    Just imagine...
















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      Nicely and most deftly done--an entirely too common occurrance in this day and age... written with real gusto and passion and a fine poet's eye .... I like it muchly... bravo.. bravo... bravo ... michael...
    | Posted on 2008-03-19 00:00:00 | by Algol46 | [ Reply to This ]
      i really love how you wrote this!! you put alot of emotion into it and it makes this poem flow so well!
    | Posted on 2008-01-13 00:00:00 | by Nessyjane | [ Reply to This ]
      Wow....Thats all I can reallu think...the sad thing this happens alot more then we would all like to admidt...Great Write
    | Posted on 2008-01-12 00:00:00 | by Bloodlust86 | [ Reply to This ]


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