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    dots Submission Name: Holedots
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    Author: Sweet Peas
    ASL Info:    21/The Weaker/South
    Elite Ratio:    5.34 - 7/9/3
    Words: 24
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 88
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    Virgin heartbeat in my breast
    Too naïve to see the jest
    Feared of love, and love obsessed,
    Left your void carved in my chest




    Submitted on 2008-01-12 18:59:02     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      a lot of people write poems here about broken hearts, lost love etc(myself included)some of them go on an d on and........... your poem is short, but you have written what you have to say, in few words but it say a lot makes its point like you know.that,s how you feel after a love that,s gone sour, empty, darkness and it is like the galaxy endless.but one day u shall look down on this hole and you shall see, it was nothing after all.
    thanks for sharing
    take care
    tschüß
    | Posted on 2008-01-14 00:00:00 | by eyeless in gaza | [ Reply to This ]
      this says so much in so few words it tells how you felt when the love in the relationship was over and the how you felt from the inside

    the poems short but as i said it acomplishes a lot in only a short poem;something that a lot of people cannot do ...myself included

    so thanks for the read

    -the girl who cried wolf to much

    p.s. welcome to E.S. and i hope you stay here with us for a very long time!

    | Posted on 2008-01-12 00:00:00 | by BlueTorcher | [ Reply to This ]


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