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    dots Submission Name: Confusion about Homedots
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    Author: lori_tab
    ASL Info:    27/f/alabama
    Elite Ratio:    4.33 - 1752/1517/481
    Words: 236
    Class/Type: Poetry/Longing
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    dots Confusion about Homedots
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    As I woke up to the illusion that this place was no longer my home
    I felt
    peace
    and longing

    from far away tonight I'll be dreaming
    fragments of desires and memories

    and when I wake up that feeling will be with me
    and nostalgia will be smothered around my face

    walking with my eyes down, walking with my face looking towards the floor

    there is dust caked into old linoleum, there are rotten black old spots leaking from the window sill

    and I look around
    and I see
    this
    difference in existence

    a character of time living in my deepest understanding of home
    and psychologically I think it affects my understanding
    of what home means to me

    if I think about it to long I begin to realize just how much I don't feel like I exist with existence
    and like I'm not really standing in this old kitchen
    and the air that I am breathing is only an illusion

    because there's no air in here only dust
    and what was suppose to be an image of a comforting memory

    t here isn't anything in my control
    and I'm just not there anymore

    if I could describe to you how much it would mean to just look around and be back into the same place again






    Submitted on 2008-01-12 23:43:55     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      This was very deep and meaningful and you did a superb job of melding great flow with a message of nostalgia and moving on. Great!
    love,peace,joy,abundance & smiles to share
    tif ~*~
    | Posted on 2008-04-08 00:00:00 | by Epiphany | [ Reply to This ]
      beautiful, beautiful, beautiful, beautiful, beautiful!!!
    | Posted on 2008-01-19 00:00:00 | by Raivn | [ Reply to This ]


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