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    dots Submission Name: You!My Love!My Foedots

    Author: Soldier O_Tears
    ASL Info:    18/M/INDONESIA
    Elite Ratio:    2.25 - 41/129/120
    Words: 193
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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    dotsYou!My Love!My Foedots

    everytime i look at you
    there's a mix of disgust and beauty
    Everytime i think of you
    there's a mix of hate and desire

    What more could be wrong if this is already wrong
    What more could be false than a cupid's target
    I always assured myself that loving you is a threat
    Yet the exact reality seems to be unacceptable
    This pleasure of being wrong is too strong

    Everytime i smoke a ciggarette
    I feel like want to end it fast
    Everytime i finish a cigarette
    i feel like want to stop forever
    Everytime i think about cigarette
    i imagine a pair of gorgeous lips blowing smoke and a "big" picture of your body
    Then i realize i have to save myself before saving you

    I can't stand anymore lights of dancehall
    I can't stand anymore sip of alcoholic liquids
    I can't stand anymore Djs playing crappy low taste of so called "techno"
    I can't stand anymore near your foul friends
    I can't stand the smell of discotheque

    I'm still far from being an angel
    But no one can stop me from being a saviour

    Submitted on 2008-01-13 10:17:46     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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