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    dots Submission Name: i miss...dots
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    Author: suicidalacts72
    ASL Info:    20/f/WI
    Elite Ratio:    3.08 - 189/150/69
    Words: 81
    Class/Type: Poetry/Angry
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    dotsi miss...dots
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    torn in two
    ripped at the seam
    never will i win
    let go of me
    dig six feet deep
    i'll kick the dirt
    over your corpse
    your already dead to me
    everything you ever said
    a hollow lie
    sick of doing this
    but you won't die
    over and over
    i wish you weren't here
    a gun
    a bullet ready for release
    i take aim
    its too late
    your looking down a barrel already
    pointed at me
    we both squeeze
    i missed...




    Submitted on 2008-01-13 12:10:17     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      poor shot? poe
    | Posted on 2008-01-13 00:00:00 | by poetotoe | [ Reply to This ]


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