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    dots Submission Name: go to sleep, lovedots
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    dotsgo to sleep, lovedots
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    go to sleep,
    love.
    don't
    wake up.

    there are fires in the sky,
    lighting up the clouds,
    smells of gunpowder
    and laughing children,
    suddenly silenced as
    they come to join you while
    you hover over
    it all.
    There are no sounds of
    trumpets, no siren calls into the sea
    as you lay there in your
    nothingness.

    The weights of this world are daunting,
    my darling,
    but only if they are in
    your constant viewing as
    you ignore your
    eyes' specially evolved characteristic
    to move.
    but, to you,
    sweet, sweet, shell
    the good was not
    enough to
    justify.
    now you lay there,
    free of malice, free of spite,
    no dreams, no functions
    no stories of might
    no love, no care, no apathy
    no sky, no day, no night.
    my love,
    how can we
    be conscious
    of what we
    are not conscious of?

    go to sleep,
    love.
    don't
    wake up.




    Submitted on 2008-01-13 17:35:28     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      THis piece is amazing. i don't know how to exactly explain why i like it soo much i just do. Its a deep thinker and i deff had to read it over a couple of times to take all of it in . and this "be conscious
    of what we
    are not conscious of?" was something that reall caught my attention
    | Posted on 2008-01-13 00:00:00 | by silentpoison | [ Reply to This ]


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