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    dots Submission Name: Folding Wishesdots
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    Author: saartha
    ASL Info:    27/F/US
    Elite Ratio:    4.06 - 230/384/131
    Words: 127
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 964
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    Description:
       A few references going on here...
    1. Origami butterflies were used during the celebration of Shinto weddings to represent the bride and groom.
    2. Making 1000 origami cranes is supposed to grant you one wish.
    3. Lavender was once called the "love herb" and was given to newlyweds for good luck.


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    dotsFolding Wishesdots
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    My little paper insects are fluttering
    their birth-wet wings in the velvet heat
    of slender lavender throats that flourish
    under a sun that will never be as wild
    or fierce as its Serengeti kin, but is still
    beautiful in a homegrown golden way

    your hands flit like darting sparrows,
    winged quotations or a flock of emphasis
    that rises and settles and explodes into
    flurries of interpretive movement
    and I find Iím listening for chirping
    more than your words, but then stories
    have always been more about telling
    and hearing than the story itself

    and when you are done, when the sparrows
    settle to sleep in the fields and your voice
    patters on silent wings into the underbrush,
    there are one-thousand butterflies
    scattered in the lavender.




    Submitted on 2008-01-13 21:22:53     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      "and when you are done, when the sparrows
    settle to sleep in the fields and your voice
    patters on silent wings into the underbrush,
    there are one-thousand butterflies
    scattered in the lavender."

    butterflies, lavender, wishes. This poem is light and happy! I pronounce joy!

    Saartha, it seems that you have come out of your slump. Even when you were in your slump you weren't really in a slump.

    Some of us just have poetry in us. I believe that it can be found in the loneliest of places, in the quietest of minds, in the people whose hearts are crying, and in those who long for inspiration.

    You truly are a poetic inspiration.

    butterflies, lavender, wishes. You make my heart fly, saartha. You make me dream. I, the Asiatic Fox, will travel to these lavender fields to dream with the butterflies and spread goodness to all.

    Thanks for a beautiful poem, saartha. Keep up the good writing!
    | Posted on 2008-01-15 00:00:00 | by AsiaticFox | [ Reply to This ]
      Hi again. You have a way with the imagination I can relate to. I like the way you interpret the 1000 cranes. Didnt know they did that. Know of Shinto only vaugely. The composition flows nicely and reads like as quiant storie like fine procelain been crafted into 1000 cranes. Folding 1000 crane for one wish is aptly titled. Regards Joachim
    | Posted on 2008-01-15 00:00:00 | by Joachim | [ Reply to This ]


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