Hate

Author: ashik Elite Ratio:    4.65 - 50 /37 /31 Words: 47

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Hate

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Skin and bones, dry and coarse Hot and bothered Puke yellow with purple Rotten Grimy spillage exiled with an order to kill Screeching voices next to screaming violins The rotten stench that makes you puke Condensed hatred thrown together Filed shard to the end

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