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Hate


Author: ashik
Elite Ratio:    4.65 - 50 /37 /31
Words: 47
Class/Type: Poetry /Angry
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Another blast from the past for me. Summer of 1995.


Hate



Skin and bones, dry and coarse
Hot and bothered
Puke yellow with purple
Rotten
Grimy spillage exiled with an order to kill
Screeching voices next to screaming violins
The rotten stench that makes you puke
Condensed hatred thrown together
Filed shard to the end





Submitted on 2008-01-13 23:49:24     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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