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    dots Submission Name: The Dream I Dreamt I Dreameddots
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    Author: Mandi Gayle
    ASL Info:    22/Female/Kentucky
    Elite Ratio:    4.45 - 298/348/150
    Words: 89
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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       This is just a bit of silliness - hope it makes you scratch your head and smile! :)


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    dotsThe Dream I Dreamt I Dreameddots
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    I dreamed a dream in which I dreamt
    I fell asleep and dreamed;
    And in the dream I dreamed I dreamt
    Not a thing was as it seemed!

    While I dreamed of this dream I dreamt
    I dreamed I awoke from dreaming;
    And in my dream when I dreamt I woke
    I found that I was screaming!

    What a scream I dreamed I screamt
    After the dream I dreamt I dreamed!
    And I woke relieved from all Id dreamt
    For now all was as it seemed!




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      i'm glad i'm not the only one inventing words. "Sceamt" is a good one. I use scrame as the past tense of scream quite a bit. Fun peice. I enjoyed it...
    | Posted on 2008-01-16 00:00:00 | by blackbird | [ Reply to This ]
      Oh my goodness! This is so wonderful! It was difficult to keep myself from laughing in class, this piece delighted me so much! The repetition of the word but in different forms was brilliant! And when you took "scream" and used it in the same manner as "dream", oh what a pleasant suprise that was! I loved it, that's all I can say.
    | Posted on 2008-01-15 00:00:00 | by doppelganger | [ Reply to This ]
      it was fun to read, bit of a tongue twister on the first reading, but it got easier after the third read, some how i had blakes tiger tiger in the night rhyme scheme in my head after reading your poem the third time,quite fast paced as if you are runing away from this dream.like i said i enjoyed it.
    thanks for sharing
    take care
    ger
    | Posted on 2008-01-14 00:00:00 | by eyeless in gaza | [ Reply to This ]
      eiks!!!
    tongue twister...
    more like brain twister trying to get all the "dreamed","dream" and "dreamt" correct
    lol...
    interesting that how you managed to use the few words to scramble my head

    "And I woke relieved from all Id dreamt" i read
    "For now all was as it seemed!"
    ;p
    | Posted on 2008-01-14 00:00:00 | by rubymoon | [ Reply to This ]
      My head hurts, after I reread the poem I just read. :)
    This was very well written. I hope I never dream that Im dreaming, or dream that Im screaming. I also loved your structure, the whole poem floated through my head at a rhythm that made me ever more confused. I really tried to find anything to criticize on but could find none.

    Excellent, keep it coming.
    | Posted on 2008-01-14 00:00:00 | by Polydectes | [ Reply to This ]


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