It's all the same -------------------------------------------
if It's all the same 2 you I will just leave
because this life that I live is all the same
were can I find the change
that I so desperately seek
I have so much to give
all this life can do is take
and it is making me break down and cry
I am left with no were to turn and nothing
to claim but my name Iv had since birth
this life is giving nothing back
I am only left with a lack
here in my heart I want to love this life
only to find that we have been left behind
and there is no looking back
has the time come to just lay down and die
and It's all the same over and over
I give with out any pay back
it has me way off track
for now I feel empty in side
from my pain I can no longer hide
the time has come and gone
and It's all the same
i actually kinda agree with chaos_bite. I write them a lot too, and lately i've been trying not to. But depressed themes are becoming overrated. I'm not saying being depressed is overreated, because i know i am also. But some people are becoming bored with these types of poetry. And they aren't holding their value, with the people who wrote them. Try changing some of your peoms up, give it a little spice. In this poem you basically talk about one thing and i kinda had to force myself to finish reading it, bring some character in it. Describe how you feel and how angry people make you. I would like to see that. You will get better with time.
The rhyme scheme seems very forced, and you need to work on grammar. Other than that, I don't mean to be harsh, but knock off the depressed woe is me thing and you might come up with some good poetry. Life isn't going to hand you everything on a silver platter, you have to do what you want. You'll be a lot happier that way.
Submission Name: It's all the same
