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    dots Submission Name: Moon Magic dots

    Author: Algol46
    ASL Info:    200/m/East of Eden
    Elite Ratio:    2.72 - 1111/1235/613
    Words: 92
    Class/Type: Poetry/
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       This poem was inspired by Walter de la Mare, a brilliant and nearly forgotten poet: http://oldpoetry.com scam scam/opoem/23370-Walter-de-la-Mare-All-That-s-Past

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    dotsMoon Magic dots

    Old as the Hills of Droon
    These ruins in the vale,
    Pillars fallen and pale
    Under the Moon.
    What of the ghosts at noon,
    Who haunt, harry and wail?
    None recall now but fail
    Under the Moon.
    Both tart and young dragoon,
    Kiss to begin the tale,
    I mark their silent hail
    Under the Moon.
    At dusk the stars festoon
    These skies above the trail
    Here where my hopes turn frail
    Under the Moon.

    Submitted on 2008-01-14 08:22:16     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      There's certainly is quite a degree of combination of mystery, magic and confusion ..............portraying a strange, fantasy world under the dreamy moon

    ........its quite like your style.....you have maintained the rhyme and meter in this piece of poetry very well.

    there is not much that one could grasp or understand through this write but its a good thriller.

    Keep it up!
    | Posted on 2008-01-15 00:00:00 | by mdsouza | [ Reply to This ]
      I love it when somebody takes on this style of poetry and makes it ulimately work out for them. Bravo and well done.
    | Posted on 2008-01-14 00:00:00 | by ErgoIgo | [ Reply to This ]

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