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    dots Submission Name: What Ifdots
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    Author: Persephone
    ASL Info:    19/f/ US
    Elite Ratio:    3.53 - 328/352/136
    Words: 43
    Class/Type: Random Thoughts/Misc
    Total Views: 582
    Average Vote:    5.0000
    Bytes: 334



    Description:
       A very random thought that really came from nowhere. I can't say much more than that, since it caim from looking at the snow all day.


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    dotsWhat Ifdots
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    What if
    spring doesn't follow
    winter.

    What if
    life doesn't always mean
    death.

    What if
    failure is a form of
    pain.

    What if
    hurt is an expression of
    belief.

    What if
    the world revolves around
    it.




    Submitted on 2008-01-14 12:50:40     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      I love this. It is very provocative; I think that the most gripping questions are the what if's that sneak up on you and keep you up at night. It almost makes me think of the song Life is Beautiful, in the beginning when he is talking about how you can't live until you die and you can't learn to tell the truth until you learn to lie. I love that song and have been listening to it over and over so manybe that is the only reason that I see the connection. Oh, well. Very interesting write!
    | Posted on 2008-01-15 00:00:00 | by jennah | [ Reply to This ]
      I was very intrigued and wonder what you mean by the ending...What is the world revolves around it?..What is "it"? I didn't understand the "what if failure is a form of pain" part because failure does bring pain, depends on the degree of failure. If it's a history test or something then I guess but if it's something serious...doesn't it bring pain already?
    | Posted on 2008-01-14 00:00:00 | by Caity | [ Reply to This ]
      I really like this! What is God wasn't perfect ? I would love life anyway!!! Thanks!!!!!
    | Posted on 2008-01-14 00:00:00 | by Reva Laine | [ Reply to This ]


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