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    dots Submission Name: lets talk about...dots

    Author: suicidalacts72
    ASL Info:    20/f/WI
    Elite Ratio:    3.08 - 189/150/69
    Words: 185
    Class/Type: Poetry/
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    dotslets talk about...dots

    let talk about everything
    i want to be
    i wish you could see
    everything i want
    what a shame
    i'll never have you
    and i'm to blame
    i push and shove
    as you pull me in tight
    its something i'm not used to
    a frightful sight
    but don't let go
    my blades too near
    hold me now
    hold me dear
    lets talk about reality
    and how i want to die
    ask me no questions
    and i won't have to lie
    i want it so bad
    you'll never understand
    but how could you
    meet this obscure demand
    i'm addicted
    a blood lust with no control
    slicing and carving
    a passion that makes me whole
    will i ever stop
    if not will i fall
    will you let go
    on the floor i crawl
    searching for you
    the one i can't have forever
    i want you to understand
    but i know you'll never
    a choice
    i must make
    love or blood
    for yours and my own sake
    i won't let go so easily
    so let talk
    i'll see someone for help
    or let you walk......

    Submitted on 2008-01-14 22:11:01     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      this was a really serious to-the-point writing and since there's no description about it, i assume this is for real and you feel this way. i am sorry if you do, i know, i have been there myself, many times. it's a very graphic picture...the blade, the cut, the blood, the pain. i don't do this anymore and your line "i'll see someone for help or let you walk" i hope you do cuz it isn't worth it. those who don't know about the razor's edge or how it burns when it strikes the flesh will not understand this but those who do, just know you're not alone! so take heart! a very good poem!

    you take care,

    | Posted on 2008-01-15 00:00:00 | by scissorhands | [ Reply to This ]

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