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    dots Submission Name: The Heart's Taledots
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    Author: D-Ink
    Elite Ratio:    1.38 - 81/59/58
    Words: 43
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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    Description:
       a poem i wrote without relating it to someone.


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    dotsThe Heart's Taledots
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    The mention of your name sends spastic shivers down my spine;
    The candyrush; the motivation.
    I need.
    I leapt once -
    With your shadows within me,
    Now that I've landed -
    Why does it still feel like
    It's void of something?




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