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Author: usglen
ASL Info:    60-Male-Garden Grove,CA
Elite Ratio:    3.12 - 59 /71 /44
Words: 129
Class/Type: Poetry /Serious
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This is a description of the worst feelings a person can have. The feelings of hungry.


For everyone it’s different
Some now and some later
After the feeling we hate
It is not from nothing but an empty stomach

I long for a good meal
It fills me up
That is how I’ll feel.
Full to the top of the cup

For breakfast it is cereal
Even before a funeral
The cereal has different ways
It is only for those that pay

Lunch is different
All full of hot munchies
Those don’t even crunch
That is why it’s apparent

Dinner is the last meal
That is how I feel
It is hot
And not fit for a tot

At eight my hunger has gone
For another day
Until I wake and yawn
Then again I’ll pay

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