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    dots Submission Name: Heartsdots
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    Author: Algol46
    ASL Info:    200/m/East of Eden
    Elite Ratio:    2.72 - 1111/1235/613
    Words: 82
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 447
    Average Vote:    5.0000
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    She kept it strung on silver string,
    About her throat among her pearls.
    It was the luster of her curls,
    This magic-forged and golden ring.

    Some sorcerer in old Beijing
    Had made this as the last of nine,
    For love a potent anodyne.
    For broken love it soothes the sting.

    What dark familiar did then bring
    This object which you do not need?
    You have no hurt! You will not heed,
    My broken heart which needs the ring!




    Submitted on 2008-01-15 14:26:18     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      It has got much the same style as that of all your other poems.....and even so, I must say that this sure seems nice and a little more different from the stuff that you usually write.

    .....short and sweet and quite, quite dramatic.....with good meter throughout this write - up.
    | Posted on 2008-03-10 00:00:00 | by mdsouza | [ Reply to This ]
      "She kept it strung on (a) silver string"

    This was lovely, but not quite as dark and fantastic as usual. The population of concubines on silk and velvet bejewled pillows while attended by rogue pirate lovers is surely decreasing.

    I liked it, I like your new styles.

    You are doing great.

    XOXO
    | Posted on 2008-01-25 00:00:00 | by blu_kittin | [ Reply to This ]
      Aaaah, the remedy for a broken heart; there be none, but we may long for one! Nuzzle the neck about which lies the ring, and she might consider loaning it!

    This one has a different flair for you, but is still a delight to read!
    | Posted on 2008-01-15 00:00:00 | by Ron Cole | [ Reply to This ]


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