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    dots Submission Name: Ebony Heartdots
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    Author: Kera
    ASL Info:    18-f-NH
    Elite Ratio:    3.67 - 116/129/29
    Words: 233
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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    I watch, trembling with fear as the trigger is pulled, emotion is anchored, fear is alive, time is gone. Motionlessly I stand, waiting for the impact, to explode into my skull. But your pride overrides in you, and you love for me is strong, for when you said you would care, and never let me die, you werent joking. As the bullet nears,so do you, jumping in the path, that it was soon to take. You fall, with a bullet in your head. Tears stream down my face, only to land on your cold dead cheek. Why, why did you do that for me? I am no one special. I have done nothing worth it. Why did you take that bullet? Why did you run in my way? I am gone, oh so gone. As the first tear dropped, as did my hope...love...and life. I await and answer still, 5 years later. I found love, but only to get my heart ripped, as if I didnt have one. I was not worthy of your love. I was to die that day. With you gone, there is no reason for me not to join. But here I stay, here I remain, to try to find another. One I can take a bullet for, one who is worthy of love, like the love you gave me. But, I cant find love with my Ebony Heart.




    Submitted on 2004-06-27 00:14:31     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      you know, for awhile i was afraid to comment on this.. i read it over and over again.. just wondering.. not really knowing what to think nor what to say.. if you could just see the battle being fought in me now maybe then you'd understand.. that's why it's taken me so long to comment on this.. this piece screamed at me from the first time i read it.. and you know why.. memories are as alive as the day they happened in words.. i have never opened this subject with you because it isn't my place to ask..

    I love you Jesse..
    that is my place to say

    Adam
    | Posted on 2005-02-28 00:00:00 | by Pyrosis | [ Reply to This ]
      first off...awww...adam commented on this one...so sweet...lol

    ok...uhm...im scared to ask what made you think to write this one...if it acually happened or not...But I like it. Haunting, gave me chills. I would suggest however putting it into poetic form for an easier read. I loved the ideas in this though. How he took the bullet for you. Love is a strange thing sometimes. Those times when you think you deserve it the least is when you get it the most and cant understand why..just go with it. Look at what you have now. You and Adam will be happy, and if he hurts you or you hurt him, lol, imma kill whoever does the damage:P hmmm...but i think the only damage to be worried about is from the whips and handcuffs...lol...well...Im glad that you told me to read this. It was chilling and dark...made me think...hmmm...not a good thing...ok, imma go now.

    ->Dark
    | Posted on 2005-03-01 00:00:00 | by drk_angl_17 | [ Reply to This ]
      Oh dear. I hope it didn't happen for real, but if it did, all my condolence. It's going to be alright. One day you'll find someone true. I very much enjoyed this. It conveyed pure emotion, and bittersweetness, more bitter than sweet rather. You did a good job describing the happening. You made the prose come alive. Wonderful job. Take care.
    | Posted on 2004-06-27 00:00:00 | by wordsofmind | [ Reply to This ]
      That is quite sad. I hope that didn't really happen to you or anyone you know. Its a good poem, I enjoyed that just I hope you haven't experienced something so dreadful as that. My sympathies if you have. Keep going sweetie, it'll be ok.
    | Posted on 2004-06-27 00:00:00 | by Mirabai | [ Reply to This ]


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