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I Just Don't Know
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I Just Don't Know
I wish it was only us two
But I know that it can't happen
That it will never come true
Cuz you're with someone else
And I'm always looking for something new
Know that the love I have for you
Will never change and never die
I may get mad at you for an hour or two
But I'm just losing my temper
Around you I can't keep my cool
Staying friends with you is hard
The attraction between us so strong
I can't get over it, don't know where to start
Cuz I'm not sure if I even want to let go
Cuz I like the hold you have over my heart
Submitted on 2008-01-15 18:57:07
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I must say that one ordinarily wouldn't know how to comment on a piece like this.
Frankly, nor do I, but here goes anyways.
This is a remarkably forward piece which would be best as lyrics, than merely a poem (there is nothing wrong with poetry, but I feel that this needs something "more").
And not to be nitpicky, but "Cuz" (in that form and spelling) refers to one's cousin, whereas 'cause is appropriate. I say that because it just doesn't fit in how your poem is.
I appologize if my criticism was harsh, but I encourage you to keep writing.
| Posted on 2008-01-17 00:00:00 | by
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