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    dots Submission Name: The End of My Fusedots

    Author: 777sacrites777
    ASL Info:    24/F/TX
    Elite Ratio:    3.06 - 343/189/83
    Words: 122
    Class/Type: Poetry/Friendship
    Total Views: 1031
    Average Vote:    4.5000
    Bytes: 805

       To a "friend".

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    dotsThe End of My Fusedots

    I sympathized and listened,
    thought nothing of myself.
    I help you through this shit,
    then it's back up on the shelf?

    I came running to you
    whenever you pleaded.
    Now i'm simply cast aside,
    no longer needed?

    Well you listen here,
    and you better listen good,
    I was your only friend,
    I did all i could.

    So fight your own demons
    and say your own prayer.
    Ask me to help?
    You better not dare...

    I carried all your troubles
    clear over broken glass.
    But still it seems you try
    to be the pain in my ass.

    This is the last straw ,
    the end of my fuse.
    Find someone else,
    cause i'm through being used.

    Submitted on 2008-01-15 20:49:57     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      they hurt the worst.
    the ones you want to love.
    you have a good heart,
    i read semi-blind eyes.
    i like this poem i find it strange
    that i relate to something that i
    would normally not chose to remember.
    | Posted on 2009-09-27 00:00:00 | by Leavingeasy | [ Reply to This ]
      ouch this is hurtful, I hope you feel better for doing it. Sounds like you were a good friend, I hope the other person can see that now.
    | Posted on 2008-01-22 00:00:00 | by forfila | [ Reply to This ]
      I liked the undertone of hateful spite in this poem. I could see myself giving someone this sort of attitude and can relate easily to the idea of being used and forgotten by someone.

    There are a few typing errors in the poem. The main one being that you should be sure to capitalize all you "i"'s since it throws the poem a little bit off visually. Also watch your punctuation as it is a little inconsistent and again, is a bit visually distracting.

    Other than that, I enjoyed the poem. good write
    | Posted on 2008-01-21 00:00:00 | by jaramae | [ Reply to This ]

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