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    dots Submission Name: Fake and Lierdots
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    Author: PrincessOfDark
    ASL Info:    17/F/Tx
    Elite Ratio:    2.2 - 22/31/25
    Words: 87
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 1025
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    Bytes: 500



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    All my friends told me you liked me
    And I believed them
    Because I feel the same way for you
    You flirted and
    You even gave me you jacket
    To wear when it was cold
    But then I found out something
    Something horrible
    You have a girlfriend
    You lied to me
    And faked your feelings for me
    I feel as if I have been stabed in the back
    Why would you do such a creul thing
    To someone who had such strong feelings for you?




    Submitted on 2008-01-15 22:13:39     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      ...do i kno you? jk. n e ways i liked it it gives off the feeling of betrayal and anger when it's fully read but it also seemed like you were holding back on it all a little bit try to add to it and see what you get. i bet it'll be great. anyways nice work!!! get a hold of me on here and see what you keep doing and check out what i got... l8r.

    Darc Angel
    | Posted on 2008-01-17 00:00:00 | by Darc Angel | [ Reply to This ]


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