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    dots Submission Name: Unpleasent Realitiesdots

    Author: PrincessOfDark
    ASL Info:    17/F/Tx
    Elite Ratio:    2.2 - 22/31/25
    Words: 106
    Class/Type: Poetry/Longing
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    dotsUnpleasent Realitiesdots

    I wanted you in my grasp
    But it seems i am too late
    For someone had stolen you from me
    She has you in her grasp now
    And it doesn't look like she is letting go
    Anytime soon
    But why would you lead me on?
    I thought you were my friend
    You could have been something more
    If you hadn't of lied
    So now I wake to an unpleasent reality
    And I realise
    That you will never be mine
    I will never have anyone as mine
    But at least there is hope
    That one day she will let you go
    Out of her grasp

    Submitted on 2008-01-15 22:27:52     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I have mixed feelings about this write...it seems more of a rant than a poem. I can see clearly what the problem is--a guy that a girl likes she can not have because he is with someone else.

    | Posted on 2008-01-17 00:00:00 | by xXCptn_SephyXx | [ Reply to This ]

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