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    dots Submission Name: Huntressdots
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    Author: MC white
    ASL Info:    20/Male/Ohio
    Elite Ratio:    3.26 - 71/73/45
    Words: 142
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    Description:
       Its been awhile, screw the punctuation, I just had to get this one out.


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    dotsHuntressdots
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    Youve left me speechless once again
    Just when I thought its over
    I guess I dont know where to end
    this love, and so I throw her

    to the back of all my thoughts
    where she sits and waits her turn
    just to make it to the front again
    and set my mind to burn.

    Slowly smold'ring with the same old fears
    the tension in my chest
    I hear love exists just in your head
    she puts that to the test

    Sleeping only in the daytime
    since the nights still smell of her
    rolling underneath my empty sheets
    my every thought a blur

    Now the days feel like Im hunted
    and I am, or so it seems
    by a the girl who shot me once and now
    tracks the blood trail as I bleed





    Submitted on 2008-01-16 00:18:18     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I think this is beautiful.

    You did an awesome job
    | Posted on 2008-01-27 00:00:00 | by Raivn | [ Reply to This ]
      as far as poetry goes, i really wouldn't consider this to be a poem... more of random thoughts... sure it sort of has a little rhyme scheme but not much... but i am sorry that you are being put through hell....
    | Posted on 2008-01-16 00:00:00 | by Big_Country | [ Reply to This ]


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