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Author: MC white
ASL Info:    20/Male/Ohio
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Class/Type: Misc /Misc
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Its been awhile, screw the punctuation, I just had to get this one out.


Youve left me speechless once again
Just when I thought its over
I guess I dont know where to end
this love, and so I throw her

to the back of all my thoughts
where she sits and waits her turn
just to make it to the front again
and set my mind to burn.

Slowly smold'ring with the same old fears
the tension in my chest
I hear love exists just in your head
she puts that to the test

Sleeping only in the daytime
since the nights still smell of her
rolling underneath my empty sheets
my every thought a blur

Now the days feel like Im hunted
and I am, or so it seems
by a the girl who shot me once and now
tracks the blood trail as I bleed

Submitted on 2008-01-16 00:18:18     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  I think this is beautiful.

You did an awesome job
| Posted on 2008-01-27 00:00:00 | by Raivn | [ Reply to This ]
  as far as poetry goes, i really wouldn't consider this to be a poem... more of random thoughts... sure it sort of has a little rhyme scheme but not much... but i am sorry that you are being put through hell....
| Posted on 2008-01-16 00:00:00 | by Big_Country | [ Reply to This ]

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